Persuasive writing is a writing form that is very useful as it can applied to many different contexts. Tristan has worked hard to develop his ideas for this piece of work. Well done Tristan.

Let’s Make Tautoro Exciting!

 By Tristan

Do you know what it’s like when your bored? I think that we should have more things to play with at Tautoro School so that everyone doesn’t get bored, plus everyone will get something to play with. For example I see people walking around doing nothing but if they had like a ball or a skipping rope or maybe a bike or something, something that will make the kids happy then it will be exciting.

 One way we should make this school more exciting is by putting a bike track around the perimeter of the school. I think we should put lumps down with the track so that they can bring their bikes here to ride and have fun. It will be remarkable to see everyone running around and riding their bikes around the perimeter. We can bring bikes so everyone stays happy and healthy. Isn’t this what everyone wants?

 Another way we can make this school exciting is having free time.What I think should happen is after we have finished our work then we can have free time. So we are not doing work all day long, at least for one hour we could have a little break off. Who thinks that’s fair? Yes or no. Because usually students get bored of doing work all day and they want a break. It is really important for the students to make sure that they are playing and learning should be fun for all of the kids.

 Wouldn’t it be tremendous if we had more options at school. That is why we need to learn more subjects so we won’t get bored. I think that is a good thing because if someone is doing the same thing all over again then that is boring, do you think that if you did the same thing all the time that life  will get boring? For example, we could do science, Art, Drama they are some exciting things that we can do.

 In summary, I think we should have more things to play with at Tautoro School. I think this because lots of people get bored of doing nothing that’s why if the teachers make the kids do different things then know one will get bored because they are doing something different and exciting.

Writer of the Week - Iverson

I am so proud of Iverson. One of her goals this term was to write engaging stories like Paul Jennings. This is what she wrote for her Term 2 recount assessment on Monday. One word - AMAZING! Read it to believe it.

What Lies Beneath 

By Iverson Year 6

 WARNING This Story may not be told to the children under the age of 8. Well, it could be, it's kind of funny. On a raw, misty Saturday in Kaikohe there I was in my house, walking as slow as a slug through the hallway to reach the fireplace. When I got to the fireplace I lay down on the ground by the fire and could still feel that cold icy breeze flowing through my hair like a river.

Then my Mum walked in and danced to her beats on her speaker. She said, “ It might just be a good day to go to the beach in Paihia.” I replied, “ Can you see? Can you feel, its cold as snow outside.” She danced, “ but the sun’s rising up. It's a great day to be playing outside and doing activities.” “ OK,” I Moaned. I got up off the floor and went to go get ready. One Hour later the sun was rising up and we were all ready to go so we put our stuff into the car. We drove off.

What seemed like a few turns later Jaryn shouted “Mum! Beach!” mum replied, “ yip we can go to the beach today Jaryn.” He shouted, “YAY!!” We took the last car park on the block and all we could really see was lots and lots of children playing in the sand and in the water. Mum said, “ go on you guys, go have a play we're not gonna be here too long.” We replied “ok, we will be back shortly.” Off we went.. Wondering around like little hindi dots in a crowd.

Kohl-lee was watching Jaryn and I was playing near the water. A few minutes later I walked into the water as deep as an adult can go. I couldn't feel the ground. I didn't even know how to swim properly. When I went to turned around I noticed something in the water. I went under the water to check out what it was. I couldn't see a thing! It was pitch silver. Haven't heard that one before aye? Anyway, all of a sudden a mysterious thing got hold of my back!

I tried to call for help but my mum was like months away from me. I panicked. I Doggie paddled to shore and ran onto the sand. There it was the culprit that got hold of my back. It was a humongous, big, tremendous... pile of seaweed. “Huh” I let out a big breath.

 All of a sudden mum shouted, “come on let's go!” I replied “Ok, be there in a sec.” I was so relieved it wasn't anything major. Feww! Ohh, and one thing I recommend is only go swimming up to your neck, otherwise things will get a bit scary. That was the scariest experience and It's was kind of funny too. I will try to forget about that time ALWAYS ALWAYS ALWAYS.

WALT respond to our kaiako's written feedback.

Today in class I demonstrated how I want students to respond to feedback and feedforward I have written on their work.
In the past students have been clicking 'resolve' without making the improvements suggested. Responses differ depending on the type of feedback. It could be a simple 'Thank you, I don't understand, Okay - I have made those changes or please check it again'.
Well done to the following students who were very successful today:

Ricci, Sonny, Heaven, Tehanah, Charlee and Amira!