Monday 20 October 2014

Recount Writing - WALT come up with language that enhances the mood/ideas of our writing.

In Room 5 has been focusing on building up their descriptive and figurative language around certain moods. Here are some of the best sentences

       


Mood
Tamaiti
Best Sentence
growing confidence
Gerry
My nervousness began to shrink. It was as if I was getting a new skin. I shrugged away my shyness.
getting ready to preform
Hohepa






Shilaine
We were standing in line like soldiers, waiting for power to come on us.

"Hopi, Kiraro!" Mana called like a chief above us. We were all in position, following his commands like trained warriors.

We waited for the curtains to open again... 3, 2, 1 The curtains began to open! Right there in front of us was a massive, cheering crowd. It was like we were presenting on X Factor.
Shy
Gabrielle
I wanted to sink into my own world and disappear
Shy
Peri
There I stood, as timid as a mouse.
Proud of myself
Letisha
“Hopi! Kiraro! Hopi!” I could see tiny little tears coming out the side of my whanaus eyes
nervous
Letisha


Hanita
I was so nervous, eels twisting and turning inside my stomach
Walking onto the stage it felt like my tummy was a tuna net that eels were trying to slip out of. I was feeling nervous.
Excitement


Nervous
Hanita


Jordan
The excitement grew inside me like a dog knowing it is about to get a feed.

All eyes were on me, if I made a mistake it would haunt me